Tuesday, February 7, 2012

Text for Editing Practice, Part I (Body Art essay)

Paragraph A (body paragraph):


        First, people commonly possess a desire to be different, and not only on a person level, but also with the way they create their own social group, adopting one or the other significant outer attribute as a sign of belonging. There are some another cases somewhat foreign for our environment when specific punctures of even scars are a must ritual for entering certain culture society. If piercing specialist is nervous or just not feeling well, then his or her negative energy will affect the patient in bad way. Moreover, the consequence could not only be external. Entire organism could be damage energetically.


Paragraph B (intro paragraph):


        During the time, most of people in the world like to piercings on various parts of their bodies, but there are a high percentage of men, women, and college students. Because many people believe that tattoos can appear themselves very special in the street. Also, the most important thing is that different ethnicities of people have different opinion about tattoos in their bodies. I think piercings on various parts of their bodies are not ruthless, but it is concerning to appearance problems of people.


Paragraph C (body paragraph):



 I think that piecing or tattoo on bodies do not make the difference from others. It just a sight, they want to change and show the world their way of being free and to see the things. I remember   a friend who formed part of a band, he used to sing at parties and other places where a lot of young people gathered to hear him sang. However, he composed the lyrics of his songs but his songs related his way of thinking against violence, religion and politics. At Final, he always said “this is my life; I am   free to do wherever I want” His attitude convince some young people piercing and tattoo like him because they said that they feel identified with him and the way to see the things.

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